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[Miss_Innocent]

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Walking in a green park
Where flowers are everywhere
With a lot of things in my mind​

Then suddenly saw SWANS..........0
Swimming delicately in the lake​

Walked towadrs them softly
With pieces of breads in my hands​

They saw me
Came towards me
Around me​

I fed them with full of tenderness
With a happy child heart
Kept on watching them as if I am in a theatre
Purity in feelings​

Made me forget of what i was thinking
Felt as if they knew me long time back​

Continued watching them
Till the sky started to be darker
Feeling sad
Not wishing to not end this moment ​

 

[celine05]

WAAW GREAT JOB, I LOVE IT

DID YOU WROTE THIS MARVELOUS POEM??

REALLY NICE

 

[Miss_Innocent]

Ofcourse dear I wrote this poem​

thx for ur lovley comment​

:1:​

 

[نـــدى الـورد]

it made me feel that i am really in that park..

loved it

thanks alot

 

[No 1 Noo]

you have awesome talent

realy i enjoyed living these feeling

 

[Miss_Innocent]

ندى الورد
&
No 1 Noo​

Thanx for ur motivation
Which i really appreciate it...o ​

:32:​

 

[um elan]

very nice

 

[أحترت أعبر]

sensational
you really have a good writing talent
.... thanx​

 

[جونار]

dear Miss innocent,000000:32:
Your poem is great but why did you choose the theatre image in the fifth stanza the 3rd line........explain?
I liked all of your lines but the last line I think is incorrectly printed....It has two not.

 

[Miss_Innocent]

Thank u for ur comment
جونار ​

Regarding the last line u r right It has a mistake (NOT) which i wrote it twice but ive realised it after printing:24:​

And i Chosed (Theatre) cz while i was writing the poem i remembered
The Swan LAke Ballet which was released in a theatre​

 

[جونار]

YOU are welcome my great MISS:32:.I liked the image from the beginning :22:but I was only wandering about the reason DEAR ,I am waiting for your coming eagrly:19:.I am really sure it is going to be the best.oooooo:39ooooo

 

[Queen***]

nice poem

it really full of pure feelings

 

[Miss_Innocent]

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